starts long before this,
breathing in experience, I offer
acceptance, attention,
listen for felt truth –
a spider’s web stretched
across mind’s empty space:
it comes, it doesn’t come – I wait,
a line appears, holding a sense,
form is born, shapes itself,
colours rush to fill this outline
/ rough-hewn sculpture
/ tempered, hammered,
so on, until

I found it really interesting to read the inner workings of how you create a poem. So different from mine. It set me wondering what I would say about writing.
One thing.
Breathing in
Experience
Because Experience is on a new line, I read it as 2 separate statements almost like a list and struggled to make sense of it.
I wonder why you put the line break there?
And I love that phrase as a starting point for creation.
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Yes it would be interesting to know how you write… But I wonder what you are viewing my poem on – is it your mobile (cell phone)? My first line reads “breathing in experience, I offer” and then the line break. So perhaps that clarifies my meaning and my process.
I have another short poem about writing, or creating generally, it would make sense if I put that up next.
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Ah. Phone mangling, that makes much more sense. Thanks. I look forward to the next one.
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